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Chapter 5 Summary (The Diamond Thieves)

No amount of speed could get Jimmy and Billy to church on time. They walked in late and daddy was furious. Tom McGee dragged out delivering their punishment but it didn’t keep Billy from daydreaming about his true life goal of joining the United States Air Force.

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Digging Deeper into the Conflict

Chapter 9 of Extra Innings: The Diamond Thieves starts off with the following:

It was curious how no obstacles arose when Skip proposed what he called the “T.J. contract” to Jonas and the mob.  They all agreed.  It was equally strange that kidnapping the mob’s “ball-retriever” was so easy.  Slave, as he was called, immediately took off running to fetch Jimmy’s fly ball.  As he stepped into the street and reached down to pick up the baseball, a whispered voice called out to him.  Panicked, the boy froze still. 

What is this?  Cliff Notes?  The original version of Extra Innings devoted pages to exactly how this scene unfolds and then I went and revised it to this extremely abridged version.  Obviously, you can probably tell by my tone that I’m not happy with this.  There is so much underlying potential to build suspense and wrestle with conflict.  So this week I am digging deeper into this particular incident and bringing it more to life for the reader.  Although I’m a little constrained on time, my goal is to get it done by Sunday.  We shall see.  I will keep you all posted and maybe provide a brief snippet of the finished copy.  Stay tuned and wish Jimmy, Billy & Skip luck as they try and escape the confrontation they receive from Jonas and his boys.

Oh yeah … and for those of you who were following … I will continue with the Chapter Summaries as well.

 

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Kidnapping the Slave

In the midst of my lumbering through these chapter summaries I recognized a major opportunity area at the beginning of Chapter 10 when the boys kidnap Slave from “the mob” (their opposing team). I won’t go into any depth here since that would only eradicate the juiciness and suspense. I just wanted to share with everyone how eye-opening and a bit saddening it was to realize and area of Book 1 still needs further development. So onward I go with adding a new piece to Book 1 (The Diamond Thieves) and I apologize to the fans who’ve already completed Book 1 and will miss out on the additional drama between Jimmy & Billy’s team and “the mob.”

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Chapter 4 Summary (The Diamond Thieves)

Skip calls everyone to an early morning emergency meeting at the baseball diamond. After the meeting, the twins decide it best to take a short-cut through the woods which side-tracks them on an eye-opening journey making them late for church.

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Chapter 3 Summary (The Diamond Thieves)

This hot summer day is about to become a scorcher as Jonas and his band of neighborhood troublemakers show up at the baseball diamond with one goal: they want the diamond for themselves.  Jimmy, Billy and all their friends have been playing ball there for years and they aren’t about to give it up to the likes of Jonas and his mob.  The settle the score, the two teams challenge each other to a baseball game where he winning team will get full reign over the baseball diamond once and for all.